its me
helllo world
the previous blogs r pretty cool and even if i write sumthin i dont think it will b as good (u no me !!)
but then i thought wat da heck! it doesnt even matter. i totally agree wid shubhi in saying tht Aarushi is indeed the flavor of the season to da visitors of r blog but anyway i guess v dont appreciate it coz weve already seen all tht in 8th.still i think all the members r doing a really good job on this blog.so im ritn a poem ( i no it might not b gud but im ritin a poem after 5 yrs !!!) so here goes
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I hear the birds chirping somewhere far
and water washing some shore
Children dance and play around
while men kill and fall in war
A smile brightens an unhappy face
a tear falls on a closed case
As our life unfolds
who knows what the future holds
All we can do is bear it with a smile
and happily take it in our stride
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pls tell me what you think of this poem PLEASEEEEEEEEE comment
till next time ADITII
p.s incase anyone cums up wid a good title lemme no.
posted by Shubhi at 2:28 AM
4 Comments:
First of all, I would like to thank you for posting that comment with regards to the new poem (or rather song) I just wrote.
Regards to your poem, I like it. The wording is not too complex but you were able to compel a strong message in just a few lines. Very good you didn't focus on rhyming and focused instead on the main idea for your poem.
The world needs more poems like these. Simple but they convey a general meaning that most people overlook these days.
Focus on your strongest emotion/s and you should be a very good poet. And continuously wrote, OK!
Good start for you!
'excellent' is wat i'd say.it's really gud n as an anonymous just said that u've said a lot from few lines.'lovely poem'.i luv the sound of the poem.man i really do.
akanksha
hey
thanx so much 4 those comment a sure morale booster
ill b ritin more but not rite now
Aditii
just what did u mean by calling me the flavour of the season. am i importuning u with my presence. no need to laugh. i like ur poem byyyyyyy the way. u can take it as a compliment. i didn't no that u had seen the men women poem in any case.
a4
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